Weekend Days
Previously published on September 05, 2005
Weekend in the country
It could be a gift or a gathering-
A word. A weekend. A whisper.
In shades of chocolate, honey, and biscuit
The perfect partner
Summer day heat wave
Sugar and spice
a chameleon hiding in plain sight,
our island universe
you asked for it
it is ending…
This entry was posted on Sunday, June 18th, 2006 at 3:34 pm and is filed under Poems. You can follow any responses to this entry through the RSS 2.0 feed. You can leave a response, or trackback from your own site.
7:46 pm on June 22nd, 2006
Okay, you wanted deep comments so here we go,
I like the overall feel of the poem, but I don\’t get the last two lines. The whole fragmented representational feel is cool and the middle is really strong. I think you can do better though (please don\’t eat me) and as always take my advise with suspicion because what the hell do I know, you\’re the author.